SUBJECT>Re: Revision POSTER>Si mon EMAIL> DATE>1108584971 IP_ADDRESS>199.184.88.166 PREVIOUS>83469 NEXT> IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>
Thanks Asher --
i am addicted to revision, some would say i do too much. I have been going over old poems recently -- this was a reflection of that -- I actually meant the two versions to be read as one poem -- maybe that is a stretch.
you seem to do a fair bit of revising yourself.
thanks again -- s.
: Si mon--
: I thought the revison was successful,
: especially the new structure you have it in.
: The poem is filled with interesting turns
: and suprises. Second to last strophe is my
: personal favorite. Surely, you should send
: this one out...AG
: Begin again. Start in the middle,