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sometimes i am a broken record...mostly i am. but i would take out all the self referencial...or the references to the process of writing -- let the poem stand on its own, wobbly perhaps, legs. sections i suggest to cut below.

: Taken Out of Context (See: Wolf)

: And I confess that I became afraid, very much
: afraid.
: Whet, whet, whet, it went all day long. The
: look in his eyes
: as he felt the keen edge and glared at me was
: positively carnivorous .

: Three days of rest , adrift as if in sleep’s
: death, the body, a boat, oarless, whore to the
: current.
: Three blessed days of rest are what I had , as
: if
: days like men could be had. A long weekend
: not unlike, bereft of fight and spite, the
: silent surrender,
: nods hello, goodbye, the precise sealing of the
: door
: morning—[did I spell that right?]-- and night
: of our long, weak end. Watch out for squalls ,

: someone should have warned. I would have
: preferred—
: I longed for--slams and slaps, the impact of
: wood
: on wood, flesh on flesh, the weak end of a
: voice keening: Why?. So I was not
: altogether surprised
: when the squall foretold smote me . Fitting
: that I was smitten from the word go. It was
: the wolf
: in him that I saw . One might say he was drawn

: to my red hood but that would only be clawing
: the surface. Of course, we met in the woods.
: [Choose the obvious metaphor and apply it to
: forest.]
: He gulped the contents of my basket, raped me—
: that old bait and switch as I no-ed my consent—
: in my grandmothered bed. Yes! Yes! [Out of
: context:] I am not a knife; he never whetted
: me.
: As I writhed about I could see in his eyes
: (the end
: of) that curiosity : So this is who she is.

: Meanwhile, he had done nothing but put his hand
: upon my arm and squeeze. There had been no
: wrenching
: or jerking . Lust ought not be sublimated, nor
: denied,
: he was heard to murmur through clenched fangs.
: I tried to explain why I feared desire: It
: reminds me too strongly of a rat in a trap .

: Ah, but are you the snapped spine, or the
: frozen
: mechanism, he slobbered as he squeezed my arm
: harder. That, our once upon a time, my only
: onced,
: my only uponed. It might have been worse, he
: smiled
: which was kinder than the lie: And they all
: lived
: happily ever after. Unsprung trap: 1 Desire: 0.

: (Epigram and italicized text taken from The
: Sea Wolf by Jack London)