SUBJECT>Re: Beekeeper POSTER>Si mon EMAIL> DATE>1108591907 IP_ADDRESS>199.184.88.166 PREVIOUS>83464 NEXT> 83502 IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

i much prefer the second version.

: If you'll indulge me, I have two versions of
: this, and I'd like input on which is better.
: They are short.

: Beekeeper

: He catches me with the buzz of his eyes.
: His honey-sweet hands lay down their ache

: at night, fold me in their code of violence.
: The porch boards creak beneath us

: when he brings his yellow-striped heart
: to me. I search the sun-dizzy clover

: for the dust of his lips. He knows my flower
: opens for the paradise of his sting.

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: Beekeeper (2)

: He catches me with the buzz of his eyes.
: His honey-sweet hands lay down their sting

: and fold me in their honeysuckle dreams.
: The porch boards beat beneath my back

: when he lights in the nest of my thighs.
: Afternoons I search the sun-dizzy clover

: for the dust of his lips, the cellophane wings
: to beat my yellow-striped heart.