SUBJECT>Re: Taken Out of Context (See: Wolf) POSTER>Laurel EMAIL> DATE>1108651177 IP_ADDRESS>156.77.108.71 PASSWORD>aaFRbor6/KzWk PREVIOUS>83500 NEXT> IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

Editorializing. Self-referencing. You're not a broken record so much as everyone is lately. Sigh. Guess I oughta pay attention and listen, eh?

And yeah, you nailed it. Wobbly legs, indeed. I don't think the poem CAN stand on those legs. Shouldn't've posted it. Gotta stop posting just for the sake of posting. I hate spending as much time as I spent on this poem only to come up with a result of such utter crap. It's frustrating.

Thanks for this crit, Jim. As always, your time and eyes are much appreciated.

Laurel

: sometimes i am a broken record...mostly i am.
: but i would take out all the self
: referencial...or the references to the
: process of writing -- let the poem stand on
: its own, wobbly perhaps, legs. sections i
: suggest to cut below.