SUBJECT>Re: Confront Your Cornea! POSTER>Si Mon EMAIL> DATE>1108906377 IP_ADDRESS>gso163-23-113.triad.rr.com PREVIOUS>83608 NEXT> 83723 IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

this has some good lines and movement -- i would cut the first line if you keep it as a title...more below.

: [Confront your cornea!] Demand
: to see your seeing! [Grab] hold
: your vision. Avoid
: belated reaction. [Don’t
: listen.] Don’t grimace
: like John Grisham’s latest
: formula. For success, find
: some bits of glass. Poke
: and prod them. Find
: them in your soup.
: Truncate your angle
: structure. Excavate
: [full frontal reflection].
: Don’t count on clock-like
: reaction. See your (think you need another word for "reaction" since you used it at the poem's start)
: seeing change. Change
: your range of mistaking
: what is real for what
: is simply chicken stock
: with chives and pork chop.
: [Someday, you’ll shape
: the shades of every meal
: you see –] in time your body
: cavity will fill like pages
: erased and rewritten. Again,
: you see, confront again!