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Beatles -- white album -- number nine. could be on pink floyd too, but i never listened much to pf until my oldest son got into them and we tried watching the wizard of oz while listening to dark side of the moon...

cut the cut -- perhaps -- i don't think this poem will stray from my own dark hollow...

thanks for stopping by --

: #9. Isn't that the number that's repeated at
: the beginning or end of a Pink Floyd song?
: It's late and I forget but I vaguely hear a
: man pronouncing the words "number
: nine" with a veddy British accent.

: Cool little poem. I much enjoyed. I liked your
: other poem poems too---were they called
: revision? I didn't comment as I had no nits
: and heck, what's a crit from me without an
: edit that tears the poem to pieces, eh?
: (smile)

: Reminds me of counting crows. You could cut the
: cut in the last line and leave that line
: hanging and let cut be implied. I don't
: know, at this hour, if that's just a little
: too cute for its own damned good
: suggestion-wise. But what the hell.

: Line 9 waits to be. Don't we all?

: Laurel