SUBJECT>Re: Cucamonga Flyer POSTER>Jim Corner EMAIL>trailer1trash2@aol.com DATE>1109058980 IP_ADDRESS>cache-mtc-ac04.proxy.aol.com PASSWORD>aaiRcIXQ1q9bA PREVIOUS>83704 NEXT> IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

: Hi Jim, generally I agree with Hannah on this
: one, although I thought that it was the
: began to be an evocative piece, especially
: in the second to last strophe. Generally, I
: am reminded of Wordsworths hermits in the
: woods along (I forget the name of the poem).
: The shanties are a card board. Strophe 2
: didn't bother me. I wasn't sure of the
: importance of strophe 3 in terms of
: elucidating/link up the discrete imagery in
: the poem, if you are aiming for a tight
: symbolic/metaphorical network. I also liked
: "your ability to apply lipstick"
: line. thanks for posting this and hope to
: see a revision, if you feel so inclined.

: Best,ag

Hi Asher, Even the good movies have connective elements between the best scenes, as with good narratives, IMO. Thanks for the praise of the images you enjoy.

My best, JDC

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