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Re. poem with subtitles
For David Ayers.
This piece appears to be wonderstruck at its own self-involvement, and, gratuitous references to Great Artists. This is not an unusual sort of piece by any means.
I say, writing is not easy, and I am suspicious of those who pretend it is. This has sold itself the Brooklyn Bridge.
Subtitles: 1, Pretentious, 2, Self-involved.
Best,
Geoff
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: walking around with her in the snow which is
: like wax
: walking around with her by the factory
: describing a dream you once had
: the eaves of the factory and icicles
: this a girl who
: wears mittens, who has to wear mittens
: and so you're wondering about the hands
: a dream in the manner of a Degas
: sculpture
: held tight to itself like that
: like his dancers
: the dark liquid warm bronze of his for
: example
: sealed like a letter
: it could have been there
: in a replica by the doorway, beside the coat
: rack
: where you put your coat on
: one of his, Little Dancer or Spanish Dance
: or a Tiffany lamp which
: perhaps she was beginning to rub
: today
: saying a name over it
: not a Degas name but another name
: one that's been on your tongue-tip for some
: time
: that's been hiding there, like a shape
: taking itself out of the cheek
: a Rodin name
: one which makes the lesson grow great now
: great given that rather more amorphous quality
: of his the hands particularly
: where they touch each other
: rising out from the breast to reach one another
: across the great
: unbelievable distance of the body
: the ground
: and the baby birds, for instance
: freezing in this weather but for no other
: reason than
: they have a raincoat
: they have a mother that is
: against this great reality
: lifting their necks up, almost