SUBJECT>Re: Only Fools Take Accordion POSTER>Christopher T George EMAIL>editorcg@yahoo.com DATE>1109355735 IP_ADDRESS>mail.acog.org PASSWORD>aaXga4uf0tS3k PREVIOUS>83904 NEXT> 83909 IMAGE> LINKNAME>Poetry by Christopher T George LINKURL>http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/index.htm

: Only Fools Take Accordion

: Since our three-personned God has lately
: sworn off all menages a quatre, and
: since my bank-account will not permit me
: to play Tom O Bedlam in the homeless
: streets for some three-daughtered king
: who once was President of Haverford,
: I go to Walmart once-a-week to watch
: the holy ones as they play a music
: only they can hear on their accordions
: of shopping-carts - you do what you can do.

Hi David

The beginning could possibly be "three-personed" or "three-person"

No hyphen needed in "bank account"

Rather than "they play a music" it could be more simply "they play music"

I am not sure about the finale, because "you do what you can do" is kind of meaningless, a throwaway. To end on the shopping carts would be better.

An interesting poem, David. Thanks for sharing it with us.

All my best

Chris