SUBJECT>Re: A Poem from the Mountains for Laurie POSTER>Metz EMAIL>mkemlmekm@aol.com DATE>1109747817 IP_ADDRESS>236-142.netwurx.net PREVIOUS>84069 NEXT> IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

Valid point. Fair enough. Comments on revision.

-- Metz

: I guess if I were the kinda guy who'd go dress
: up and screw around at a Medieval Fair and
: consider myself authentic, this would engage
: me. Otherwise it just sounds like some
: modern guy donning the poetic equivalent of
: a coat of armor and prancing about.

: **yet there is nothing here that could have
: occured yesterday. Even the dragons. You can
: go to places in the world where the locals
: will describe the mountains that way and
: when a change in weather occurs invoke them.

: If I see anything that leans your way, it might
: be maid, lady and consort - but that seems
: weak to me.

: So...?

: And toddlers toddle, not crawl ... by
: definition.

: Now child.

: Thanks.

: Gary

: PS, I'm not asking you like the story or care
: to read it, but sometimes I think those in
: these forums look for something that is not
: there, beyond the story/poem and then crit
: that.