SUBJECT>Re: The Good Wife's Guide : 3 POSTER>Jude Goodwin EMAIL>jude@goodwinstudios.com DATE>1110321220 IP_ADDRESS>S0106000d933a93d0.vn.shawcable.net PASSWORD>aaVJ1mJgvTfiY PREVIOUS>84457 NEXT> 84494 IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>
hi geoff
so I guess I was thinking that sometimes, I don't want to tell the reader how best to read it, I want the reader to read how they see fit. and sometimes i don't want to put a pause it just want it to run and sometimes (most of the time) i write my first drafts without punctuation, then stick it in during revision.
thanks as always
He wanted to know it all the light as it flooded the kitchen
just as the baby cried her housecoat, pink or yellow today
the snapping of the stove as it lit the kettle the warm teapot
the brush of his daughter's curls through another little
white shirt He wanted the smell of it the milk on her breath
its quick searching along his cheek the sounds of a turquoise radio
and It's a Wonderful World the baby tossing rice pablum and mommy
smiling, humming along He wanted to know the long day
with all its details He was desperate for it and wanted it most
when he was home at last when she would duck away
his coat in her arms the baby watching him from her minder
with eyes like night owls ready for flight.
now for punctuation - "Commas are writers' and printers' marks telling the reader how best to read the text, sometimes for the sake of clarity, sometimes for niceties of meaning. "
jude