SUBJECT>Re: Appaloosas POSTER>Bowen EMAIL> DATE>1110990755 IP_ADDRESS>68.95.106.173 PREVIOUS>84877 NEXT> IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

Chris,

Thanks!

I'm glad you liked this, but I think it was an error in judgement. Feels wrong now.

Apparently "Widowed" will be the last decent thing I'll write. LOL!

: Hi Ash!

: First congratulations on winning THIRD in the
: March IBPC with your poem,
: "Widowed."

: Another fine read from you here, Ash. I would
: suggest you don't need the second "to
: be" at the end and that one will
: suffice, stronger.

: Not sure either why you have capped the run-on
: lines which seems unnecessary as well. I
: mean "Hear... Answer... Salt...
: Horses... To be" -- seems affected.

: "your ocean of grief" seems too much
: hyperbole and lets down an otherwise subtle
: poem.

: Poem looks about "there" with just
: some attention needed to finalize it -- nice
: work once again, Ash!

: Chris