SUBJECT>Re: Separation POSTER>ryan EMAIL> DATE>1111193907 IP_ADDRESS>cache-dtc-ac08.proxy.aol.com PASSWORD>aaYfRWN2Zn1KM PREVIOUS>84996 NEXT> 85042 IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>
hi-
I enjoyed this poem. very eerie. very much looking for a reason to live. or feel. effective.
just a quick comment. i had a hard time getting past the constant mention of we/our/were/we/our..etc. the poem seemed overly reliant on pronouns.
other than that. loved. i hope the rain lets up for the speaker.(s)
thanks
ryan.