SUBJECT>Re: Mis/match (revision) POSTER>Asher EMAIL> DATE>1112926606 IP_ADDRESS>nova.lib.uwo.ca PREVIOUS>85902 NEXT> 85939 IMAGE> LINKNAME> LINKURL>

Carmela?

I agree with you: I was thinking over that line IGE line today. And also there seem to be a few sloppy places in here. I'm trying to clean my cuberts...yes...on setting up the last sentence of the poem. Agreed. Now. Who exactly are you?

Asher

This is interesting

: i personally think some of the detail can be
: tweaked. (how bout a bus instead of a
: train?)

: which is to say: current events -- how does a
: poet deal/incorporate the very current? if
: at all?

: currant. did i mispell it?

: also think you could have handled the allergic
: reaction line a bit more swuavely (word?) --
: the punnish stuff (i to e) is succint but
: well, yes, to my eyes and ears, slightly
: cliched -- i'm not sure how -- and i dont'
: think dropping the medical jargon is what i
: mean

: the way you have it -- doesn't help set up the
: last sentence of poem *enough* -- i think

: perhaps its just looks sloppy -- to me -- which
: is my prob

: (or my head is somewhere else -- Igg, IgA --
: mediated reactions -- IAG, AIG - i sell
: assurance, insurance and delayed brain
: reactions?)

: but i'm prolly wrong so massive grain of salt

: thanks, Asher

: Robinson