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Elizabeth=Bishop=that poem she wrote that ends with the tramp yelling: Love must be put into action!

Yeah, I wish the whole thing was odder. The pillbox hat spilled out unedited and Zapruder is where I unoddly, unedited veered. Perhaps in revision I'd veer in a different direction.

Hut Hurt Hat Heart was the title of the poem on Poetry Daily or Verse Daily today. I saw those 4 words and was determined to get them into a poem, dammit. (smile) So, that's why the heart is a hurt down yonder and nothing something odder.

It's late. I gotta get some sleep. Thanks for the feedback. I think the poem's trying too hard, no?

Laurel

ps: Read your Henny and Dr appt poems and will crit one or both tomorrow, Mista Z. But for now, I gotta catch some zzzs.

: well i haven't spent enough time with this --
: and i should come back. but i will give you
: my first read impression. I really liked the
: idea of the poem, the heart being different
: odd things. not sure right now who the
: elizabeth is, but that didn't bother me. i
: was excited that you continued the conceit
: in the second part, but then disappointed
: when it was the zapruder film. i wanted it
: to be odder.

: more below....

: Action!!!